Thursday, March 19, 2009

Proofreaders - how are you doing?

OK, you proofreaders and editors!

What's wrong with this description of the Woodstock BOFPC?

"Board of Fire and Police Commissioners
"The powers and duties of the Board of Police and Fire Commissioners are established by State Statute and pertain to sworn members of the Police Department. These duties include: to conduct the testing process for appointment as a Police Officer, to administer the testing process for promotions, and to conduct hearings on charges brought against a sworn member of the Police Department. This Commission meets as needed. For more information, contact the Police Chief at policechief@woodstockil.gov or (815) 338-2161."

No prizes, but you get to feel really good about yourself if you find five errors.

2 comments:

Another Lawyer said...

1. Title says "Fire" but it only seems to concern the Police.
2."Commission"(sic) should only have one "m"
3. State statute doesn't establish anything, the legislature does.
4. The first mention of Police Officer describes the position as "sworn" the second and third do not and the fourth does.
5. Grammatically, "These duties include: to conduct" should read conducting-administering .... etc.

Best I can do...

Gus said...

Thanks. There are still errors. Try further? Anyone else?